Fog-Shawl of Silence

Posted on January 3, 2013 by Joanne Edith

Fleeting
Eloquent
Illusory
Sheer shards soften stark world-edges
Beckoning, as a stairway, to other-worldly wonder
Tree trunks straight and tall
Proud prayers standing in line
Pointing to paradise.

Muffled
Misty
Mirage-like
Elusive…
As sensual, saturated sky, just before sunrise

Ephemeral..
As low-hanging blue moon, just before dawn.

Suddenly
Stealthily
Secretly
Lifting, as if by loom, no longer to survive this day
Mystical moments here and vanished
Grainy reality returns

Enveloping the day.

written in response to Trifecta Writing Challenge Prompt: Survive

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12 Comments on “Fog-Shawl of Silence”

BCIJo (aka Joanne Edith)
January 4, 2013

Thanks…I have a great foggy forest photo of my own but with this darned broken leg I couldn’t get to it, so I used this MS Clipart photo. Mine is, admittedly not as striking. I love this too!

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Lumdog
January 4, 2013

I love fleeting, eloquent, illusory. This perfectly describes so many things that we want and can’t have.

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jannatwrites
January 4, 2013

I like the rhythm of this poem. Oh, and the photo is just gorgeous!

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Draug419
January 3, 2013

I like the one-word lines stacked on top of each other, progressing into the longer lines. It reads in an interesting way!

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- BCIJo (aka Joanne Edith)
  January 4, 2013
  
  Thank you…often a single word has impact when it can settle in to one’s brain unencumbered by other words. Thanks…seems like your posts are always first and mine, often are last . I’m sure there is a message there but I’m not sure what it is😉
  
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Trifecta (@trifectawriting)
January 3, 2013

Peaceful and lovely.

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- BCIJo (aka Joanne Edith)
  January 4, 2013
  
  Thank you…Fog, as instant tranquility.🌁
  
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Stephanie B. (@B4Steph)
January 3, 2013

Sheer shards soften stark world edges – that’s nice. I love the alliteration throughout. Great title too. I get a lot of fog in my area. I love it. And you have captured the feel of it. Nice piece!

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- BCIJo (aka Joanne Edith)
  January 4, 2013
  
  Yes, I love fog. If I wake up to find a pre-dawn fog, I usually grab my camera and try to capture a good pic or two. Mostly, though, it’s the quiet that I love.
  
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Paula J
January 3, 2013

I especially like the title.

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- BCIJo (aka Joanne Edith)
  January 4, 2013
  
  Thanks…that’s how it feels to me…like a comforting cloak if silence. Thanks for your comment.
  
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KymmInBarcelona
January 3, 2013

Such a strangely sensual poem. Easy on the psyche.

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